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Post by TEAM_DERRICK on Jul 30, 2009 20:47:08 GMT -5
scene 1 should begin like this.
Somewhere in Pennsylvania there is an underground resistance base.
Big Boss and Colonel Ocelot are staring through a one way mirror. On the other side of the mirror, there is a woman giving birth to twins.
Big Boss states that he doesn't feel right about what they have done. He believes that cloning is wrong. blah blah blah.
Ocelot remarks about how this is their only chance. Talks about how The Patriots need a secrete weapon.
Big Boss shrugs.
Ocelot makes some tounge and cheek remark about how "the worlds greatest soldier will do as a father".
They both laugh.
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Post by Mizagium on Jul 30, 2009 20:55:14 GMT -5
Fallen Liberty
Chapter One
Philadelphia: the City of Brotherly Love, and the birthplace of American freedom. Nothing more than a symbol now, a paragraph in the history books. Books that were in the process of being rewritten by America's new masters. The coming of war brought conflict to American soil for the first time in almost a century, the last being the American Civil War. Abraham Lincoln was able to keep the nation from falling apart then, but such was not the case this time.
America was on the brink of total oblivion. Its military shattered, the government decapitated, and the people subjugated. Yet there was still a glimmer of hope, for in this very city were freedom was born once, it is being born once more.
In a secret military bunker, tucked away from the main pathways and roads, Big Boss stared with general unease, through the one-way mirror, at the woman screaming in pain. Each time she screamed, he flinched, much to the amusement of his companion.
"A bit squeamish, are we?" Colonel Ocelot teased. Big Boss shot him a stare that would cut diamond. "It's only childbirth. I know you've seen worse on the battlefield. Done worse, in fact." Something about his friend's discomfort put a smile on the colonel's face.
"It's different," Big Boss replied, his face contorting with the woman. Not in sympathy for her pains, but for another reason. "This is just... wrong." There was no better word for how he felt.
"Wrong? Do explain."
"Who are we to play god? Each man was brought into this world as a unique individual. Now we have gone and taken that from this child. He will never be an individual. Only a copy."
"Now's not the time to find a set or morals. America needs this; the world needs this. The Patriots have always defended American freedom, and now we have failed. This is our only chance: our secret weapon against the Nazis! Why can't you see that?"
"I see it alright, but I don't like it." His whole body shuddered as the first child was born. "I don't like it one bit." but that wouldn't stop him from loving that child with every fiber of his being, a fact which he smartly kept to himself. Regardless, Ocelot seemed to be thinking along the same lines.
Moving in the way of his sight, Ocelot said, "I wonder how the world's greatest soldier will do as a father?" Big Boss scowled. "I can see it now: 'Daddy, can I have a cookie?' 'No, son. Here, eat this snake instead. Better kill it fast.'" Ocelot broke down into a fit of laughter as he was pushed aside. Big Boss crossed his arms and resumed watching the woman.
"You said something earlier, Jake." Ocelot picked himself up and faced his friend once more. "You asked me: 'Who are we to play god?' Well, I know who we are," Big Boss looked suspiciously at him.
"Who are we?"
"We're the goddamn Patriots."
It must have been his imagination, but Big Boss swore he hear the Liberty Bell chime in the distance. Impossible, that old thing was taken down as soon as the first German Panzer rolled through Philadelphia's streets.
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Post by TEAM_DERRICK on Jul 30, 2009 20:57:02 GMT -5
(perfect. it could be a bit longer, but thats great stuff)
Brainstorm session?
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Post by Mizagium on Jul 30, 2009 20:58:40 GMT -5
That was a test. I'm gonna go back in and do more now.
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Post by TEAM_DERRICK on Jul 30, 2009 21:05:10 GMT -5
awesome.
Ok Adam. Your turn.
2 german officials are speaking to each other.
they speak of the recent lack of terrorist attacks in the area.
They continue to talk about how even though Big Boss is middle-aged , he can still easily dispatch whole squads of men.
They end their conversation with an off handed remark about the secrete project being worked on in the base. They both have no clue as to what it is.
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Post by Mizagium on Jul 30, 2009 21:09:49 GMT -5
(Let me try something real quick) Philadelphia: the City of Brotherly Love, and the birth of American freedom. Nothing more than a symbol now, a paragraph in the history books. Books that are in the process of being rewritten by America's new masters. In this very city were freedom was born once, it is being born once more. In a secret military bunker, tucked away from the main pathways and roads, Big Boss stared with general unease through the one-way mirror at the woman screaming in pain. Each time she screamed, he flinched, much to the amusement of his companion. "A bit squeamish, are we?" Colonel Ocelot teased. Big Boss shot him a stare that would cut diamond. "It's only childbirth. I know you've seen worse on the battlefield. Done worse, in fact." Something about his friend's discomfort put a smile on the colonel's face. "It's different," Big Boss replied, his face contorting with the woman. Not in sympathy for her pains, but for another reason. "This is just... wrong." There was no better word for how he felt. "Wrong? Do explain." "Who are we to play god? Each man was brought into this world as a unique individual. Now we have gone and taken that from this child. He will never be an individual. Only a copy." "Now's not the time to find a set or morals. America needs this; the world needs this. The Patriots have always defended the American freedom, and now we have failed. This is our only chance: our secret weapon against the Nazis! Why can't you see that?" "I see it alright, but I don't like it." His whole body shuddered as the first child was born. "I don't like it one bit." Moving in the way of his sight, Ocelot said, "I wonder how the world's greatest soldier will do as a father?" Big Boss scowled. "I can see it now: 'Daddy, can I have a cookie?' 'No, son. Here, eat this snake instead. Better kill it fast.'" Ocelot broke down into a fit of laughter as he was pushed aside. Big Boss crossed his arms and resumed watching the woman. "You said something earlier." Ocelot picked himself up and faced his friend once more. "You asked me: 'Who are we to play god?' Well, I know who we are," Big Boss looked suspiciously at him. "Who are we?" "We're the goddamn Patriots." How is this? |
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Post by TEAM_DERRICK on Jul 30, 2009 21:11:49 GMT -5
FUCKING AWESOME!
I hope you dont mind, but i fixed some grammar errors
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Post by Mizagium on Jul 30, 2009 21:13:44 GMT -5
Do you need me to do anything else with it? More dialogue? More description?
Should I use Ocelot and Big Boss's real names?
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Post by TEAM_DERRICK on Jul 30, 2009 21:18:04 GMT -5
If you can think of any way to make a scene better, do it.
And for the record Big Boss's name is Jake.
Ocelot is also known as Adam. He is also a Russian(USSR) Colonel.
The Patriots are funded by The Soviets.
The USSR wishes to recreate America so it may one day defeat Germany.
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Post by Myrdraxxis on Jul 30, 2009 21:21:36 GMT -5
(hmmm ambiguous. Ok here we go)
Metal Gear Solid: Fallen Liberty
Chapter 2
By TheHiddenAssassin
1990
Two men stared stood out in the knee-high snow, resolute to the freezing temperatures around them. Both wore the gray and black uniforms of the German Reich; captains.
"It is has been quiet around these parts for some time now." the first, a tall hook-nosed individual remarked, speaking in surprisingly good English. The second, shorter than his comrade with darker hair barely visible undert his cap grunted in response.
"The American terrorists have moved on." the shorted one said. "This area has become too heavily fortified to attack. No one would be foolish enough."
"No, save for one." his comrade remarked sagely. The short one snorted.
"Big Boss? That man was a terror, but time has surely begun to catch up with him." he said, fiddling idly with the silver cross around his neck, an award of many hard battles.
"That man is still a terror in his own right, aging or not. He is still capable of killing scores of our German warriors at one time. Did you hear the report at from the front last month? Two camps of men found slaughtered in a single night. Does that sound like the work of an aging push-over?"
"Fine fine. But still, even he would not attack us here. We have pushed the Americans to their heartland." a long silence passed between the two men. Finally the tall one turned.
"Come, Wilhelm. We should head inside before this weather kills us. I have to get my men ready for inspection tomorow." The shorter one turned to his friend.
"Oh? What for?"
"Apparently the Gestapo is sending a man here. To review that new, secret project the spooks are working on."
"Ah, of course. Anything shady always involves the likes of the Gestapo. SO do you have any ida what exactly they work on in that base?"
"Not a clue. But I suupose we must not dwell on it too much. Ours is not the place to ask questions."
"True. Come Fran, lets heasd back to the club. THe schnapps are on me tonight."
Both men began the slow trudge back up the hill, toward the large German camp.
The camp, wreathed in snow and lines of German tanks, built among the ruins Washington D.C, with the White House looming silently in the backdrop.
(k, how was that?)
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Post by TEAM_DERRICK on Jul 30, 2009 21:25:46 GMT -5
AWESOME!
YOU GUYS ARE AWESOME!
I knew i could count on you guys.
feel free to come up with your own ideas for this story.
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Post by TEAM_DERRICK on Jul 30, 2009 21:33:19 GMT -5
ok
Tyler, could you give me a scene with Big Boss personally training Solid and Liquid Snake, about 12 years after the first scene? They do not know that they are clones. Snake and Liquid have a standard sibling rivalry. Big Boss is their father figure, so they call him dad.
Adam, For some reason, I like the 2 german captains. So the Gestapo man comes along. After a burst of questions, the Gestapo guy gives them the code name for the project and nothing else.
Code Name: Metallzahnrad Mk ich
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Post by Mizagium on Jul 30, 2009 21:34:46 GMT -5
Sure.
Go over Chapter one once more. I think I've done all I can. If you like it, its ready to go.
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Post by TEAM_DERRICK on Jul 30, 2009 21:35:14 GMT -5
all right!
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Post by Mizagium on Jul 30, 2009 21:36:43 GMT -5
by personally training, I assume you mean CQC. Since they're 12, what would you like? Weapons? Hand-to-hand? How to kill a man with a pencil eraser?
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Post by Mizagium on Jul 30, 2009 21:37:09 GMT -5
Also, do solid a liquid have REAL names?
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Post by TEAM_DERRICK on Jul 30, 2009 21:44:05 GMT -5
CQC hand to hand
Solid is David
Liquid's name is classified in the mgs univers. He'll be named... Tyler
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Post by Mizagium on Jul 30, 2009 21:44:42 GMT -5
Ha.
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Post by TEAM_DERRICK on Jul 30, 2009 21:46:37 GMT -5
:3
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Post by Myrdraxxis on Jul 30, 2009 21:48:00 GMT -5
Oh btw im gonna make that Gestapo guy my super badass German assassin character.
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